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[Todd]

Hi Emily, welcome to the site. I really like this. Its clever. It reads well. The final two lines pop really well. I'd consider paring it down just a bit for impact keeping only the most interesting parts. Maybe cut a third. The thing is while the list goes on it puts more and more pressure on the final lines. I may also want to see some hint of the briny end somewhere earlier to give the end some additional surprise resonance. These are just my initial thoughts. I hope they help some. Again, I really like the poem.

Best,

Todd