The hopes for tomorrow
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I liked this. Could really see the imagery and this woman sitting there thinking, melancholy.
You have some rhymes in there but it's not consistent, if you improve on this aspect the poem would be stronger.

Thank you for sharing!
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The hopes for tomorrow - by BlackSeconds - 03-17-2013, 02:43 AM
RE: The hopes for tomorrow - by Aphroditeny - 03-17-2013, 06:31 AM
RE: The hopes for tomorrow - by newsclippings - 03-17-2013, 08:23 AM
RE: The hopes for tomorrow - by BlackSeconds - 03-26-2013, 02:57 AM



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