I am.

I am.

C.Alive
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03-15-2013, 08:03 PM

I like many lines in this poem. I personally had some trouble finding the rhythm, but it wasn't disturbing. The alteration indeed is an improvement to the original. You added some nice drama in lines like ''your holy knight. Your sword. Your crest." Good job overall and refreshing in terms of choosing imagery.

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RE: I am. - by Jamie - 03-13-2013, 06:00 AM

RE: I am. - by karinane - 03-13-2013, 06:51 AM

RE: I am. - by milemke08 - 03-13-2013, 07:36 AM

RE: I am. - by milemke08 - 03-13-2013, 11:02 AM

RE: I am. - by saeity - 03-13-2013, 08:34 PM

RE: I am. - by serge gurkski - 03-14-2013, 01:30 AM

RE: I am. - by C.Alive - 03-15-2013, 08:03 PM

RE: I am. - by rowens - 03-17-2013, 10:43 PM

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