03-14-2013, 04:33 AM
(03-13-2013, 12:57 PM)NakedBear Wrote: I’ve never lived alone,I like the simplicity of the poem combined with great rhythm, cool word play, and real emotion. I agree it might flow better without some words like "with", but that's the only critique I can offer you. Thanks for the read
I’m told it’s lonely:
with cold sheets,
silent meals,
restive hearts confined by space.
Real lonely.
Restive space confined by heart,
silent meals,
cold sheets,
these I know.
Luckily, though,
I’ve never lived alone.
I don't think much of the name, sorry.
Mikey.
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