03-13-2013, 07:36 AM
(03-13-2013, 06:51 AM)karinane Wrote: Fantastic. It really reads well. My only critique is a grammatical one. the line "'til the reaper comes and lay you to rest" should be "comes and lays" or "comes to lay". I really like the sense of rhythm though.Thank you!!! That line has been giving me trouble, I re-wrote it several times but it seemed to be just a tad off beat compared to the rest of the poem. However, switching it to " 'till the reaper comes to lay you to rest" makes it fit perfectly
