New hope

[milemke08]

Remember I am a donkey, not even a pig let alone a hog.



New hope

When your winter is a month too long
and you hear no peace in the robins song.
You've lost all faith in the human race
and for you there is no intervening God. This last line breaks the flow of this stanza. Intervening has too many syllables for the meter you used here, I would consider re-writing this line.

You find some hope in your daughters eyes
but it's soon lost in the people's cries and your lovers lies. just to lose it in your peoples cries or your lovers lies
You're looking for something that you know is there
but you just can't find at February's end.

You won't find it in a whiskey jar
a bag of weed or a nine bar. I think adding a few syllables here would help
A poker game doesn't hold the key
a diamond flush can't set you free.
For all the wealth that you can gain
it can't fix this worlds pain. it can't fix this worldly pain

So where can you go to find this hope
that you need so bad you'll never let go,
well, it's just my opinion right or wrong
you'll find it in the first spring sunrise
just after dawn.