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I Woke Up

karinane Offline

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03-13-2013, 03:00 AM

I like the suggestion to change the line to "Last night I woke up..."

I don't know about the line "Leaving me left in pure bleakness" It seems repetitive. Maybe just lose the "left" so it is "Leaving me in pure bleakness"

I like it a lot though. Especially the ending

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I Woke Up - by Seth31 - 03-11-2013, 10:09 PM

RE: I Woke Up - by Claire - 03-12-2013, 06:26 AM

RE: I Woke Up - by Seth31 - 03-12-2013, 07:41 AM

RE: I Woke Up - by karinane - 03-13-2013, 03:00 AM

RE: I Woke Up - by milemke08 - 03-13-2013, 04:15 AM

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