One in a Million

[billy]

we're always nice ><><><

it's very bare and that works. some of the enjambment is good. the problem for me is the length. it seems to weaken the poem. what i did like about it was the one word, i was trying to work out what it would be as i read and i never got it. mu suggestion would be to trim a few of the lines away.

oh i forget 'hello'

I think this is where you post a poem?
I am writing a poem and I'm not sure how to improve it, though I know it can be improved. Please help but be nice(:


One in a Million

I want to say
a million words
to you.

Instead,
I stop the list at
one.

I am down to
a single word,
hoping you will
say the same.

If I could tell you
what has always been
on my mind,
maybe this wouldn’t be so hard.

Maybe, I would be
speaking to you
right now.

Maybe, there would be
no wonder of what to say or
what to feel.

Please listen,
please care.

For what I am about to say,
took me time to realize
I can.

It is not much,
just one word,
but it is the courage
I worked to gain.

This is what
I never thought
I would do.

I dare myself to walk
toward you,
so unpredictable.

Butterflies take flight
as I look into your
eyes.

I wish I could
turn around,
forget about all this,
but I am
already standing
in front of you.

I want to say
a million words
to you.

Instead,
I stop the list at
one.


I am down to
a single word,
hoping you will
say the same.

You smile
at me
as I look
at you.

I hold my breath and
tell you
the only word I can,
the word that starts all this: “Hello.”