03-10-2013, 03:54 PM
Hello Freezy! I enjoy the topic of the poem. The message of it can reach out to a great many people (including myself) of whom have experienced a similar experience. I especially like the effect the effect of your punctuation in the first two lines of the third stanza. It really stresses the importance, and I think you should expand upon and end your poem with the same idea. That way the effect of the stanza would be very immense. You've got something going, keep going at it.