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False hope?
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03-10-2013, 06:50 AM
I think this is a great first poem. There's some poetry BS and some grammar BS and some punctuation BS that needs improvement and you will get that through editing and tinkering but the really big accomplishment here is that you arranged some words on a page that made me, a stranger from a 1,000 miles away, understand your emotion. Good job. Poetry is all about vulnerability and acceptance and you can't have one without the other. Now get to work on the BS
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False hope? - by DizzyEyedShrew - 03-07-2013, 01:02 PM
RE: False hope? - by tjs2465 - 03-07-2013, 01:14 PM
RE: False hope? - by cidermaid - 03-07-2013, 05:33 PM
RE: False hope? - by billy - 03-07-2013, 06:17 PM
RE: False hope? - by DizzyEyedShrew - 03-08-2013, 07:44 AM
RE: False hope? - by Jamie - 03-08-2013, 08:10 AM
RE: False hope? - by Tommy - 03-10-2013, 06:50 AM
RE: False hope? - by Claire - 03-11-2013, 09:41 AM
RE: False hope? - by Volaticus - 03-29-2013, 03:46 AM
RE: False hope? - by trueenigma - 03-31-2013, 04:53 PM
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