03-06-2013, 04:33 PM
Hi
enjoyed the read. This one felt very real and personal....it read so well that I almost had to remind myself that it was not directed at me. (I started to have internal reactions to the accusations...but I don't like absinthe!)
I know it's misc and you have not asked for crit - but i did feel a couple of the longer lines felt too long. In particular i wanted to have Dying for a response on a line all by itself. Probably just me again!
AJ.
enjoyed the read. This one felt very real and personal....it read so well that I almost had to remind myself that it was not directed at me. (I started to have internal reactions to the accusations...but I don't like absinthe!)
I know it's misc and you have not asked for crit - but i did feel a couple of the longer lines felt too long. In particular i wanted to have Dying for a response on a line all by itself. Probably just me again!
AJ.