03-06-2013, 05:23 AM
I enjoyed reading this. It's brief yet makes its impact. And I like the final line.I added and deleted some words and punctuation just for meter's sake. Thanks for sharing!
(03-05-2013, 12:02 PM)Gemma Wrote: The worms resurface, yet again,
In dark recesses of my brain.
A madness reigns the dead of night
as worms feed on deep lack of light.
Shine a torch into my eyes,
murder me with sheer surprise..
But kill the worms that creep and creep..
I'm not awake, yet not asleep.
I would really appreciate your critique, be honest!
