emerging

[brandontoh]

The rumbling of my self-awareness
trampolines on the inside of my expanding skull
spilling out my ears in waves of liquid air. -- Strong imagery. We're off to a good start! =)
It washes me in its smoky essence; -- I'd remove the word 'its'.
I feel my beauty again. -- 'I feel beautiful' has a more personal touch, and I think that'll immerse the readers more. Personal opinion. =x
I am whole: my mind has re-inhabited my body
and my body has not run off. -- Hmm, I think these 2 lines are a little too long. A little too in-your-face as well. Perhaps you can think about rewording the lines?

I can see
the heaviness that still tethers me, -- How do you see heaviness? I think there's something I'm not getting. =x An explanation would be very much appreciated. Thanks!
but as my steady, inward breath
picks out and captures
the particles of happiness
floating through the sunshine, -- Once again, good imagery, but a little too wordy I think.
I begin to radiate
a glowing knowledge of me,
and my chains grow longer.

They begin to thin,
pulling away,
apart from the yesteryears of writhing tears
and pained breath
of haunted thoughts
of flashing wake-dreams
(materialized as reflections
in the mirror
in the puddles
in my full eyes). -- Lovely stanza. =)

I have jumped the gap;
now to remember
to stay on this side. -- Good finish too. You ended off the poem real strongly. Thanks for the read, and hope I'm of help! =)