03-04-2013, 09:22 PM
Hi Billy. Thanks for your feedback. This is the first poem I've ever posted anywhere, and I'm glad to have some input.
I definitely will work on wordiness. My only issue with your revision is it takes away the rhyme. Interesting you don't think it's prosaic. I'm unsure how to categorize my poems, but that is a discussion for another thread I suppose.
What makes you feel it's about bipolar? Are there shifts in mood or imagery that indicate this?
Thanks again :-)
I definitely will work on wordiness. My only issue with your revision is it takes away the rhyme. Interesting you don't think it's prosaic. I'm unsure how to categorize my poems, but that is a discussion for another thread I suppose.
What makes you feel it's about bipolar? Are there shifts in mood or imagery that indicate this?
Thanks again :-)