Slave

[Jae Mc Donnell]

Goldyfish,
Thanks for the pointers. In my poetry, I'm very much about maintaining the essence of mystery. The grape, bread, and worm are all symbols of alcohol - wine, beer, tequila. I am in high school and see so many people become slaves to partying. That is what this poem is about, discretely.

I have to say, I didn't get any of that from the poem. It's good you have a solid idea in your head, but if you fail to put this across to the reader you end up failing in you goal. Try developing some of the images and make your point more (getable) just because you get what you meant, doesn't mean others will.
Thanks for sharing and I hope you keep writing