02-28-2013, 09:38 PM
I agree with newsclippings, feels old fashioned, which is nice. but if you're going for that, might want to change the last stanza a bit with makeup etc.
also in the first stanza, planks and lamps seems to be a pretty weak rhyme, especially in relation to the other rhymes in the poem.
I really love the third stanza though. great imagery and lovely description of a difficult time for the poem's actors.
also in the first stanza, planks and lamps seems to be a pretty weak rhyme, especially in relation to the other rhymes in the poem.
I really love the third stanza though. great imagery and lovely description of a difficult time for the poem's actors.
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The howling beast is back.
The howling beast is back.

