My livingroom revolution

[newsclippings]

you can share my biscuts
drink my tea
watch my t.v
listen to the radio
coffee and cream to
the drinks cabinets free
we'll sort this world out
in my livingroom revolution

L1: biscuits,
L3: t.v.
L5: do you mean too?

I think this might be a seriously under-thought poem. You're putting it in serious critique, but how much time did you really spend on this? I see no reason for all the mistakes -- it's 8 lines long.

Anywho: I think you could change "coffee and cream to // the drinks cabinets free" to "coffee and cream too // with liquor cabinets open" (if that's the meaning you're going for).