carry on

[aaron]

hi Aaron
as I read this I could almost hear a melody. is it just a poem or are you looking to turn it into a song? I think it'd work well as one of those simple melody singer-songwriter kind of songs. Part of the reason is the rhythm but also because I couldn't get a clear image of what you were trying to get across with your words... I think put to music whatever message you're trying to give would be amplified.
anyway, just my 2 cents. =]

Yeah, it is for sure a song. Just curious what you guys think about it. Is there anything you would change to smooth out the rhythm?