Yellow Feevah

[shemthepenman]

I didn’t find any problems with comprehension, not really, and I really enjoyed reading it, very humorous; although the fact I didn't get that the object of desire is Asian is neither here nor there for me. And, in point of fact, one criticism I have is the title… I mean, really ‘Yellow Feevah’? Surely you could come up with something a little less offensive; although, having said that, the title (for me) is so bad that it actually makes me laugh out loud every time I read it (as I suspect was the intention). But such are my PC sensibilities, that I can't help thinking I would change it.