02-22-2013, 06:19 AM
Hi Jaylyn,
This reads like a rap or spoken word. What type of help were you looking for? What feels off to you that you'd like to address? Also, some things work spoken but don't work as stand alone written poems, so I want to approach this consistent with how you intend to use the piece.
Best,
Todd
This reads like a rap or spoken word. What type of help were you looking for? What feels off to you that you'd like to address? Also, some things work spoken but don't work as stand alone written poems, so I want to approach this consistent with how you intend to use the piece.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson