02-21-2013, 09:54 AM
I just love your poetry. \(^0^)/
S1 was very good, and S2 followed closely in how good it was. I love the way S1 flows, but S2 adds so much to it that I had to mention it as well.
I don't think the line about the knife sounded very forced. Maybe slightly, but not strongly.
The one thing I can try to critique on is that I belive it should be "something worse" not "something worst". I also kind of like the original first line in S4 as opposed to the edit on that one.
S1 was very good, and S2 followed closely in how good it was. I love the way S1 flows, but S2 adds so much to it that I had to mention it as well.
I don't think the line about the knife sounded very forced. Maybe slightly, but not strongly.
The one thing I can try to critique on is that I belive it should be "something worse" not "something worst". I also kind of like the original first line in S4 as opposed to the edit on that one.