02-21-2013, 06:09 AM
Really interesting poem...I'm guessing in L2 you mean the flower hold this world together by its roots? Hoping that something so beautiful and natural could hold this world together that we are destroying?
I do find a bit of the wording OTT, just makes it too complicated to read...you can still have clever imagery and meaning with a more simple tone to it.
Beautiful poem...just needs a bit of work with the language and words.
I do find a bit of the wording OTT, just makes it too complicated to read...you can still have clever imagery and meaning with a more simple tone to it.
Beautiful poem...just needs a bit of work with the language and words.
"We are the music makers
And we are the dreamers of dreams
Wandering by lone sea breakers
And sitting by desolate streams" ~ Arthur O'Shaughnessy
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And we are the dreamers of dreams
Wandering by lone sea breakers
And sitting by desolate streams" ~ Arthur O'Shaughnessy
http://invisibleshadows86.blogspot.co.uk/
My journey