My Tears Are Made of Chalk - 2nd Edit

[Michelle311]

Thanks, Todd for all the info and for taking the time! I really appreciate it. I am new to poetry, so I appreciate all of your criticism.

I should explain that originally the title was the first line of the poem. I opened up an old word doc to start writing the poem. When I finished it and went to save as a different doc, "To Whom It May Concern" was the title of the old doc. I was kind of feeling it, so I went with it instead. I agree that it doesn't connect with the poem. But I wrote the poem as a gift of sorts for someone and I think he would enjoy it.

Thanks also for the info on the breaks. I played around with it a bit and wasn't satisfied. But I think it's definitely something I will end up doing, just haven't quite figured it out yet.

I think the "Hair" part of the poem might be the weakest part. I am working on tweaking this the most. It feels more forced to me than the other sections.

I'm not sure about the "there's always such a thin line between love and hate" will probably mess with this more.

But thank you for everything. Hoping to improve and possibly post an edit.

I am enjoying the site a lot as well, been reading and learning a lot!