My Tears Are Made of Chalk - 2nd Edit

[Michelle311]

Thank you very much, I am happy to be here!
I think I am having a hard time with the first few lines especially. But I would appreciate any and all feedback!

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Loved this -- that's not my whole comment, don't worry! I'm just on my way out, I'll give it a good going-over in a few hours but I really enjoyed the first read and had to let you know

Thank you Leann! Can't wait to hear from you!