I wish.

[Leanne]

Hi there -- I take it by "relive that night" you mean that you'd do the same again, since from the next two lines it sounds like quite a good experience. Sometimes we say we'd like to relive something because we'd make changes so the outcome was different, but leaving regrets behind and living seems like something worth re-experiencing.

I wish there was more detail in this poem. The hints are tantalising but not quite enough to let me build my own ideas. I think it's partly because the first line doesn't really say anything -- in a tiny little poem, you need every word to be important. I do like the tie between relive and lived, though maybe it would be strengthened by "I wish I could live that night again" or something?

I just feel that it's lacking an adjective of some sort, or a little bit of imagery to bring it to life.