ode to purple

[brandontoh]

hmm. maybe its because my interpretation is very undeveloped. i was lead to believe that you just read it based on the breaks and commas, NOT a situation where the reader searches for sentence components and breaks it down in that fashion. i was very aware of the pauses and enjambments i created if following the generic, read as you go understanding. but like i said, i'm very novice in this field and is my second poem i've really written

This sounds quite provocative in my head, but I assure you that's not my intention. So here goes. If the reader needs to search for sentence components and break them down, then you're doing something wrong. Readers end up doing grading for an English paper instead of reading the poem. If you ever graded an essay, you'll know that papers rife with grammatical errors are boring beyond all hell to grade. There's also no way around it, since to make sense of your poem my mind is constantly correcting stuff. Following the breaks and commas solely is not possible for me at least.

Also, it's understood that you're new to this, but try not to let that be why you settle for anything less. Like Leanne said, read more poems and leave some feedback. You'll improve that way.