Keep That in Mind

[nothing_good16]

A strong read For the ladies!
There is something strange about L5. "friend" doesn't fit. Perhaps "befriend". Or perhaps you want to get across the idea that you (women) are of equal worth to diamonds.
Another little niggle concerns the first line of stanza 4. You seem to say that men are still superior to women if women only have enough "man" to stand alone.
Overall, I like the power of this piece.

thanks for your feedback. But, for stanza 4 I meant it in the sense of women being the greater gender using the structure of the word "woMAN". I was attempting to say that sense we already have "man" in us (our name), that we don't need a man (in person form). We have enough in us to sustain for ourselves.....if that makes any sense. lol...maybe i should find a way to rephrase it.