12 - 4am

[brandontoh]

Hello! =) For the past few days I haven't been posting as often due to Chinese New Year festivities. Now I'm finally back, and I guess I'll start the new year (according to the Chinese calendar) with a poem! Thanks for reading my poem!! =)

1st Edit:
12am-4am
It's the last train.
Empty vessel
Steaming through
The frozen world.

Can't move.
Icy breath --
I’m still alive.

There it goes;
The last bustle.
The final sound
Still echoes.

Apathetic,
Or a little
Depressed
Still.

To move on,
I'll let the moon
Swallow me.


Original:
12am-4am
It's the last train.
An empty vessel
Steaming through
The frozen world.

I can't move.
Icy breath
My sole life sign.

Watched it pass;
The last bustle
Of the night.
The final sound
Still echoes.

Apathetic,
Or a little
Depressed.

Reality
An impasse.
To move on,
I Let the moon
Swallow me.