02-12-2013, 12:29 AM
I really enjoyed this poem. It is rich in visualization. Some words, I have to agree with Timeonmyhands, were awkward only because the meaning is not evident. I did however, find the greatest reverie in reading this phrase:
"Contentment closes our eyes and slides us back in our seats,
we bathe in brief sunlight that falls beneath the trees,
sleep finds my lolling head and thoughts nod unfinished,
landing tiptoed birds listen for their supper with cocked heads,
a token bark breaks our trance, just in time, for another biscuit. "
[quote='TimeOnMyHands' pid='115440' dateline='1360354778']
Nicely done,
Heather
"Contentment closes our eyes and slides us back in our seats,
we bathe in brief sunlight that falls beneath the trees,
sleep finds my lolling head and thoughts nod unfinished,
landing tiptoed birds listen for their supper with cocked heads,
a token bark breaks our trance, just in time, for another biscuit. "
[quote='TimeOnMyHands' pid='115440' dateline='1360354778']
Nicely done,
Heather