Getting into this stuff

[Leanne]

Though the technical aspects could do with some work, I find I really like what you've got to say. Slam-type poetry is really hard to critique in the written format, but there are a few things that might help regardless of how you eventually want to present your poetry.

I like your shift from "shit" to "expression" after checking yourself, that's effective (and pretty respectful!). Also the personification of your words ("they run because they're hurt and it's their escape") is well done. Watch your repetition though -- it's a good device but it can easily become a bit of a filler.

All poets are pretentious dicks, you know, it's part of the job description