A stepping stone

[Amy]

Thank you for the feedback. The poem always seemed a bit off, though perhaps part of the reason is that i always seemed to have had a country theme playing along with it. A collage of statements was however the general intentions, as strange as it may seem.

Hi Amy,

Welcome to the site!

Here are some suggestions for your poem:

1) phrases like full speed ahead, stepping stone, and guiding light are cliches. If you've heard it before than it is likely something you should cut from your poetry.

2) This poem is made up more of statements and not as much grounded in figurative language. Here's an idea, what if the poem really used stepping stones, like the speaker was trying to leap across a creek stone by stone...could that become an extended metaphor to ground the poem?

3) You're attempting to rhyme without meter. I suggest checking out the poetry practices that use meter. Read through them and try some. This is something that takes practice to get good at.

I hope some of that helps.

Best,

Todd