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Past Perfect (edit)

Past Perfect (edit)
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02-11-2013, 04:28 AM
Oh yes, "life sentence" and "relative clause" both work very well without seeming too punny -- also "clause" picks up the sound of "yours" at the end of the next stanza, which is a nice touch. Well done!
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Past Perfect (edit) - by hamartia - 02-07-2013, 05:02 AM
RE: Past Perfect - by Leanne - 02-07-2013, 06:04 AM
RE: Past Perfect - by hamartia - 02-07-2013, 06:08 AM
RE: Past Perfect - by hamartia - 02-07-2013, 06:53 AM
RE: Past Perfect - by billy - 02-10-2013, 11:13 AM
RE: Past Perfect - by hamartia - 02-10-2013, 08:31 PM
RE: Past Perfect (edit) - by Leanne - 02-11-2013, 04:28 AM
RE: Past Perfect (edit) - by billy - 02-11-2013, 11:03 AM
RE: Past Perfect (edit) - by Bizzy - 02-11-2013, 10:26 PM



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