Past Perfect (edit)

[billy]

almost excellent hamartia. you capture sad in an original way and that's very hard to do without cliche. i love how you use words to do with writing in order to express the break. i'm so glad i got to read the poem.
wish i had mor constructive feedback but apart for the one part i see nothing wrong with it.

thanks for the read.

After that, in love became had loved. what great opening line, it makes us use the title to get some reason for it.
We passed perfect and became plural,
found safety in separate phone numbers
and the way our keys no longer matched like teeth. i'm not sure teeth and keys work to well.
 
I'd like to attribute the errors to their authors,
but time and proximity have married our idioms -
you write like me and vice versa,
my turn of phrase tucked neatly into yours.
 
Would that we'd had an editor, we lamented,
as we dealt the crockery into two even boxes.
Someone to unsplit our infinitives,
to give the piece the body it lacked.