02-09-2013, 10:18 PM
Hi Serge
Sorry but this just does not do anything for me on a poetic level. It reads more like a shopping list of picture stories i might want to see in my next sexual fantasy magazine. I don't have a problem with poetry that is sexual or even pornographic in nature. (I particularly like flying pork!). Sadly (by comparison, after reading some of your other poems), this one has no imagery, subtlety or finesse and if there is poetic art used I will need others to point it out for me. Sorry to be so harsh, but then this is the serious critique board.
I have come to really appreciate your submissions and make a point of reading your work because it is more often than not very enjoyable and I highly rate a lot of your work....In my opinion this submission is not worthy of your name or this thread. JMO of course and I will continue to look out for some of your other poems.
AJ.
Sorry but this just does not do anything for me on a poetic level. It reads more like a shopping list of picture stories i might want to see in my next sexual fantasy magazine. I don't have a problem with poetry that is sexual or even pornographic in nature. (I particularly like flying pork!). Sadly (by comparison, after reading some of your other poems), this one has no imagery, subtlety or finesse and if there is poetic art used I will need others to point it out for me. Sorry to be so harsh, but then this is the serious critique board.
I have come to really appreciate your submissions and make a point of reading your work because it is more often than not very enjoyable and I highly rate a lot of your work....In my opinion this submission is not worthy of your name or this thread. JMO of course and I will continue to look out for some of your other poems.
AJ.