02-07-2013, 06:36 PM
woohoo! found it. [:
Leanne, you had it bang on for interpretation. it was meant to be this person/woman doing something against her feelings; not her will, as she's obviously doing it willingly, but against her innards. i had hoped it might come across that she was doing it for this other person and s/he was taking advantage, even though s/he knew what the narrator felt.
and Billy, that's almost exactly how i had it structured on my DU post, i just didn't fix it with the formatting here. good call, and glad you liked it. maybe that interpretation will help with title suggestion? i'll go do some critiquing myself now. [:
thank you both.
Leanne, you had it bang on for interpretation. it was meant to be this person/woman doing something against her feelings; not her will, as she's obviously doing it willingly, but against her innards. i had hoped it might come across that she was doing it for this other person and s/he was taking advantage, even though s/he knew what the narrator felt.
and Billy, that's almost exactly how i had it structured on my DU post, i just didn't fix it with the formatting here. good call, and glad you liked it. maybe that interpretation will help with title suggestion? i'll go do some critiquing myself now. [:
thank you both.