Parallel Lines
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Thanks for the feedback - helplessness in the face of a lack of chemistry between the couple is the tone I was going for so glad you sensed that. Might change to 'your soul' and 'my flesh' which, while not contributing much in terms of imagery underlines the theme.
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Parallel Lines - by Bizzy - 02-06-2013, 01:22 AM
RE: Parallel Lines - by heslopian - 02-06-2013, 04:17 AM
RE: Parallel Lines - by Bizzy - 02-06-2013, 11:39 PM
RE: Parallel Lines - by brandontoh - 02-06-2013, 04:01 PM
RE: Parallel Lines - by billy - 02-10-2013, 10:58 AM



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