1930's woman

[serge gurkski]

I feel tempted to give you my view but pls as said before: bin at will.

1930’s woman (for Clare in memory of Phyllis)

Gentle and quiet, gentle and quiet
Meekness and submission and softness of heart. <<< Meekness, submission and softness of heart
She will not stray. From her chosen path she will not depart.<<< She will not stray, will not depart.
Her eyes are not haughty, her words are not proud
And she holds fast to the promise she once avowed. <<< she holds fast to promises she once avowed.

Softly and quiet, softly and quiet
The words are unspoken that dwell in her heart
No terrors will tempt them, from her lips to depart.
Her will is set fast and her morals too proud
To abandon the promise that she once avowed.

Broken and quiet, broken and quiet
Her love lies in tatters and shrouds her sad heart
And her hope for fulfilment did long since depart. <<< fulfillment
But her heart is too stubborn ..…..too proud Her heart is too stubborn, too proud
To give up on the promise that she once avowed.

Peaceful and quiet, peaceful and quiet
The silence surrounds her; rests well with her heart full stop or colon
As the bonds are all broken and with death do depart. the bonds are all broken, (I don't know what to do with the rest of this line)
Integrity intact, her conscience can be proud iintegrity intact (?), her conscience is proud.
That she held fast to the promise that she once avowed. <<< she held fadt to the promise, that she once avowed.

Empty and quiet, empty and quiet.
She goes through the motions of renewing her heart
Yet from the mould of her past life she cannot depart<<< again I would skip: yet.
For the wounds on her heart are still far too proud <<< again: full stop
So she holds fast to her promise and continues to wear <<< she hold fast to her promise and continues to wear the sign of her vows
…….the sign of her vows.

It’s safer this way….she’ll opt for a quieter life. <<< hm! ;-) It is safer this way. she will opt for a quieter life.