02-03-2013, 01:35 PM
i had to read it a few times, leave and come back to read it a few more.
at first it felt overburdened with lttle let up as for a breath but then it sort of clicked into place and i was able to get through smoothly. without the intro, how would we know why your heart was hammering etc. i loved the poem but think you could have led us into the skylark better. remove the intro and pretend it's not your poem. a line or two would improve the beginning no end.
at first it felt overburdened with lttle let up as for a breath but then it sort of clicked into place and i was able to get through smoothly. without the intro, how would we know why your heart was hammering etc. i loved the poem but think you could have led us into the skylark better. remove the intro and pretend it's not your poem. a line or two would improve the beginning no end.