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In Defense of the Cold Ones
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01-28-2013, 05:03 PM
Both opening stanzas are improved in my opinion. For what it's worth I think 'shameless' is more appropriate and more dramatic - you are describing a state of being without shame not without mercy. Given time you'll maybe be able to distance yourself from the title which (I apologise for saying) doesn't help the poem at all.
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In Defense of the Cold Ones - by cotidiano - 01-26-2013, 08:21 AM
RE: In Defense of the Cold Ones - by rowens - 01-26-2013, 11:52 AM
RE: In Defense of the Cold Ones - by cotidiano - 01-27-2013, 04:21 AM
RE: In Defense of the Cold Ones - by Pete Ak - 01-28-2013, 04:23 AM
RE: In Defense of the Cold Ones - by cotidiano - 01-28-2013, 03:32 PM
RE: In Defense of the Cold Ones - by Pete Ak - 01-28-2013, 05:03 PM
RE: In Defense of the Cold Ones - by brandontoh - 01-28-2013, 03:10 PM
RE: In Defense of the Cold Ones - by cotidiano - 01-28-2013, 03:42 PM
RE: In Defense of the Cold Ones - by popeye - 01-28-2013, 03:41 PM
RE: In Defense of the Cold Ones - by brandontoh - 01-28-2013, 03:45 PM
RE: In Defense of the Cold Ones - by Hidrolic - 01-29-2013, 11:55 PM
RE: In Defense of the Cold Ones - by Leanne - 01-30-2013, 05:20 AM
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