01-28-2013, 01:32 PM
(to the mods i know this is not a serious critique so i guess remove it if you want but i feel like someone had to acknowledge this poem and might as well be me)
honestly this is sick and by sick i mean awesome, great, wonderful, badass etc. you kind of fell off in the middle and by fell off i still mean it was good but not to the caliber that you were coming with in the beginning but then you can back super strong with the stanza about angels and devils. one of the best poems i've read on here so far. my only gripe with the whole thing is first stanza fourth line i would take out "that" because i don't feel like it flows but beyond that this was excellent. thanks for the read
honestly this is sick and by sick i mean awesome, great, wonderful, badass etc. you kind of fell off in the middle and by fell off i still mean it was good but not to the caliber that you were coming with in the beginning but then you can back super strong with the stanza about angels and devils. one of the best poems i've read on here so far. my only gripe with the whole thing is first stanza fourth line i would take out "that" because i don't feel like it flows but beyond that this was excellent. thanks for the read
"Life is a dream for the wise, a game for the fool, a comedy for the rich, a tragedy for the poor."-Sholom Aleichem