01-27-2013, 12:47 AM
If you smoothed out lines like
"Forever here I could stay"
And maybe spent a little more time playing around with ideas here, it could approve.
But so far, it's ok. Ok, but could be better. Depends on what you want to do.
"Forever here I could stay"
And maybe spent a little more time playing around with ideas here, it could approve.
But so far, it's ok. Ok, but could be better. Depends on what you want to do.