01-23-2013, 03:38 PM
Dim wits still shine in the dark 
-- love that!
You've chosen your end words well for two reasons: one, they are words that can be used in more than one way to achieve various shades of meaning and two, the use of "fake" in particular helps give the poem a very strong link that builds the overall theme of uncertainty, artifice and deceit of self and others (even though you ran out of steam a bit toward the end!)
In S6 L1, I think you mean "I'm through with dark".
Fantastic first sestina, I greatly admire your courage
-- love that!You've chosen your end words well for two reasons: one, they are words that can be used in more than one way to achieve various shades of meaning and two, the use of "fake" in particular helps give the poem a very strong link that builds the overall theme of uncertainty, artifice and deceit of self and others (even though you ran out of steam a bit toward the end!)
In S6 L1, I think you mean "I'm through with dark".
Fantastic first sestina, I greatly admire your courage
It could be worse