Perpetual Cycles

Perpetual Cycles

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01-22-2013, 01:43 PM

Rhyming couplets! =D The poem as a whole has both effective and ineffective imageries mixed in. Some lines feel forced and a little cliche, so I'd suggest cutting unneeded lines/stanzas and you'll be good to go. =)

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Perpetual Cycles - by doolasmind#11 - 01-22-2013, 08:57 AM

RE: Perpetual Cycles - by brandontoh - 01-22-2013, 01:43 PM

RE: Perpetual Cycles - by doolasmind#11 - 01-22-2013, 01:50 PM

RE: Perpetual Cycles - by Pigler - 01-22-2013, 03:19 PM

RE: Perpetual Cycles - by brandontoh - 01-22-2013, 03:41 PM

RE: Perpetual Cycles - by corawrites - 01-24-2013, 12:53 PM

RE: Perpetual Cycles - by doolasmind#11 - 01-24-2013, 04:58 PM

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