this is a Poem

[benthejack]

I enjoyed this, A fantastic effort for a non native english speaker!

Rowens pointed out the main grammatical points, I guess my only comment would be that the structure seems to contrast with the content quite a bit (it sounds light and playful when spoken) maybe making it slightly slower paced would portray her "lost in thoughts" and absentmindedness a little better.

But a part from that as I said, I enjoyed it

thanks,
Ben