01-19-2013, 02:40 PM
Hello JayDog,
You are one day older than me here...lol...
And congrats to you for putting this up at last.
Better late than never, isn't it?
Well, what do I think about your work?
It does not look so 'poetry',
but still there is 'something' in there.
I think that it can be composed into some beautiful lines.
You've got the ingredients, I mean the 'input'.
Now what you need is to go on 'cooking' them.
And as brandontoh had said,
I also really feel 'something' with this "What's your name again?".
This really 'hurts'...a lot.