01-13-2013, 05:56 PM
Well, I'll be honest: If anything, you used too many metaphors. Doing so exposes your poem to cliches, and might go above a reader's head. Don't let anyone tell you you need metaphors for a poem to be good. That's like saying you need a porch to have a house. It's nice, usually, but not needed.
I mean, it's a bit hard for me to read what you've written because it seems like you tried to create strong imagery rather than a poem.
I mean, it's a bit hard for me to read what you've written because it seems like you tried to create strong imagery rather than a poem.
Won't be seeing you through the field of tears I left behind