01-13-2013, 03:37 PM
Hey Destiny,
"I saw your protectors
load and hand you that gun"
This confused me a bit because it's random. It goes from emotions to a gun being loaded.
The last two stanzas: I think you can build a poem around them because the emotions described in the previous stanzas can be summed up in these. Feelings like abandonment and the narrator still showing effort. They just seemed more intense because the narrator is showing how he/she feels through the kid without actually saying "this is how I feel" like the beginning of the poem.
"I saw your protectors
load and hand you that gun"
This confused me a bit because it's random. It goes from emotions to a gun being loaded.
The last two stanzas: I think you can build a poem around them because the emotions described in the previous stanzas can be summed up in these. Feelings like abandonment and the narrator still showing effort. They just seemed more intense because the narrator is showing how he/she feels through the kid without actually saying "this is how I feel" like the beginning of the poem.