Ballincollig (rev. I)

[Leanne]

Much to like here. I'm only passingly familiar with Rory Gallagher, mostly through tributes by other artists whose work I admire, so if he's been their influence I should remedy that You evoke the senses nicely with colour and sound, even smell.

I do get a bit lost in all the adverbs though, and I think I'd be tempted to remove a few of them, especially "ferociously", which would work far better as "ferocious".

Now, away to Youtube!