01-13-2013, 06:57 AM
This is my first time ever posting here. I write poetry and I show it to my friends and family and they all say they like it but that only keeps me content with what I am doing. So I decided to post here where people would be brutally honest. I do not know much about the templates for poetry so I would especially be interested with insight as to how I can improve in that area. Other than that have away.
Strength of a man measured in deeds
Pursuit of paradise based on the creeds
Lords might judge but serfs are the jury
Kings react slow but peasants must hurry
Happiness is lost, Faith goes too
You know not fate, Yet fate knows you
Condemned to life, We serve out the sentence
Most feel guilt, And give due penance
Keep your head down, Lest you scrape the ceiling
Ambition is kept near, What a guarded feeling
Doubt does lurk, Ready to pounce
Hope does float, Ready to bounce
Bold men aspire, They dare great feats
Weak men sit, And reserve the seats
A flower blossoms in the coldest of places
And humility masks the boldest of faces
Life is dear to none and all
The meek can rise, The great can fall [/i]
Strength of a man measured in deeds
Pursuit of paradise based on the creeds
Lords might judge but serfs are the jury
Kings react slow but peasants must hurry
Happiness is lost, Faith goes too
You know not fate, Yet fate knows you
Condemned to life, We serve out the sentence
Most feel guilt, And give due penance
Keep your head down, Lest you scrape the ceiling
Ambition is kept near, What a guarded feeling
Doubt does lurk, Ready to pounce
Hope does float, Ready to bounce
Bold men aspire, They dare great feats
Weak men sit, And reserve the seats
A flower blossoms in the coldest of places
And humility masks the boldest of faces
Life is dear to none and all
The meek can rise, The great can fall [/i]