01-08-2013, 02:57 PM
This is very nice. It gets your message across several times in different ways, while still having some structure.
I like poems that aren't too ambiguous, but I feel this one may be a bit too straight forward and didactic. Maybe if you cite an example of these ideas having an effect on a person it might give variety to the message.
What do you think?
I like poems that aren't too ambiguous, but I feel this one may be a bit too straight forward and didactic. Maybe if you cite an example of these ideas having an effect on a person it might give variety to the message.
What do you think?